I am going to bypass examining your work, because the problem permits a very easy shortcut.
If you have a right triangle, whose tangent is $(4x)$, then the legs are (in effect) $(4x)$ and $(1)$.
Therefore, the hypotenuse is $~\displaystyle \sqrt{16x^2 + 1}.$
Therefore, the sine of this angle must be
$$\frac{4x}{\sqrt{16x^2 + 1}}.$$
Addendum
Responding to the comment of Dan:
Need to show that it's still valid when $x < 0$.
I agree, my oversight.
When $x < 0,$ you can let $y = -x \implies y > 0$.
Then, if $\tan(\theta) = 4x$, you have that $\tan(-\theta) = 4y.$
Then, by the analysis at the start of this answer, $\sin(-\theta) = \displaystyle ~\frac{4y}{\sqrt{16y^2 + 1}} = \frac{-4x}{\sqrt{16x^2 + 1}}.$
Therefore, since $\sin(\theta) = -\sin(-\theta)$, you have that
$\sin(\theta) = \displaystyle \frac{4x}{\sqrt{16x^2 + 1}}.$
Edit
In my opinion, an open issue is whether the Addendum is actually needed. In Analytical Geometry, where the domain of trig functions are angles, you have the issue of whether a right triangle can be constructed, some of whose side lengths are negative.
The analysis at the start of my answer was based on physically constructing the analogous right triangle. I don't know how the issue is being taught in Analytical Geometry, so it is better to add the Addendum, erring on the side of caution.
In Real Analysis (AKA Calculus) the issue is somewhat convoluted, because the domain of the trig functions are real numbers, rather than angles. However, you can interpret the domain of the trig functions to be various arc lengths, with respect to the unit circle.
Under this interpretation, it seems to me that the Addendum is not needed, because you can construct a right triangle [whose hypotenuse is $(1)$] that lies in the $4$th quadrant just as appropriately as constructing a right triangle that lies in the $1$st quadrant. Then, you have constructed a right triangle, one of whose legs is a negative number.
Best Answer
Hint: $$\sec\theta\csc\theta(1-\cos\theta) = \sec\theta\csc\theta(1-\cos\theta)\frac{1+\cos\theta}{1+\cos\theta}.$$ How much is $(1-\cos\theta)(1+\cos\theta)$?